In my previous post on gangs I said, "Mitt Romney will stand up against gangs."
Jeff Fuller responded with this:
"I'm guessing that Romney's gang policy is that he's against them."
I wish that I had a formal system where I could have others read my post before I make them, and give me feedback, so if you wouldn't mind, just give me your e-mail address, and I'll send you them for feedback. I will do the same for you, if you want feedback from me.
Based on Jeff's feedback I changed my post to say this:
"Mitt Romney is an effective leader in working with law enforcement, community leaders, and ex-gang members in stopping the scourge of gangs within our communities. This might not seem important to the average middle class white person, but those in the inner cities know that gangs and the gang banger mentality is destroying large segments of our population. Mitt Romney understands this, and is an effective leader in trying to fix it."
Thanks for the feedback, keep it coming, and drop me an e-mail if you wouldn't giving me suggestions on my ideas, wording, spelling, or grammar before I make a post.
Could we add a section about Gangs to Mitt Romney's Wikipedia site?
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